Gorgeous... I love how the theme of turning from one phase to another is reflected in the lines, the revolution of the mandala, and the repeated three-note variations in the music.
Such a tremendously effective, and affecting, piece of art. Thank you for sharing this with us! (If you're a reader on the fence about jumping in I recommend it: spend the couple minutes, it's well worth it.)
I loved the part about 'fleeing the sultry summer heat / and my prying gaze.' It was so poignant to me, that you brought in the theme of observation and how it affects the subject, and using that as a concept to underline the interconnectedness. There's that 'ludo-narrative resonance' I love so very much to see! To observe an observer in the midst of observing: bringing the reader literally into the seat where they themselves, as a being, can resonate on a meta-textual level and feel, themselves, interconnected with the story. In that way, I felt inspired to regard my own interconnectedness with the world around me, as a person engaging with the art: such a thing is the definition of effective art. Masterful!
My favorite part, however, was in dusk/autumn. In my playthrough, it was the final part, so it felt meaningful to me personally as a reader/player to read: 'life remade itself, sculpting its own form like clay.' On a subjective level, it reminded me of my own individual growth journey, and that I had a right to feel included amidst the threads of the great tapestry of nature.
(I also just realized it's mirrored in your season-choice of autumn, alluding to change, both corporately and individually, in nature and the beings that are, for better or worse, part of it, shaping and creating and changing it by the very nature of *being* it, as in that sense it interacts with itself. In that lens, speaking as a very neurodivergent person, any sort of difference from the norm really is shucked of stigma, isn't it? Seems silly to feel ashamed of the natural deviations of an always-changing, interconnected nature, or pressure to alter our 'clay' to match the imaginations of beings that are not us. These are some of the thoughts I'm taking away from the experience of engaging with Mandala.)
Again, well done, and I look forward to your next release!
Myself and a lot of my close friends are in the process of reshaping ourselves either figuratively or literally, and I think about that when I see amphibians, which must reshape themselves in order to survive.
Oh, this was a very interesting piece of art! Honestly, as someoen who's been practicing poetry for eight years, I started to think about how the forms it could take nowadays with a multimedia way of expressing it!! It reminds me of calligrams. You created something very interesting here and I think we should be exploring this more!
For the actual text, now, I enjoyed the circular motif, and the connection to nature by senses! The renewal of these sensations (imitating the one of seasons, or the days cycling) was something I appreciated!
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a beautiful little experience. thank you!!
Gorgeous... I love how the theme of turning from one phase to another is reflected in the lines, the revolution of the mandala, and the repeated three-note variations in the music.
Quick playthrough video
Holy shit, this was beautiful.
Such a tremendously effective, and affecting, piece of art. Thank you for sharing this with us! (If you're a reader on the fence about jumping in I recommend it: spend the couple minutes, it's well worth it.)
I loved the part about 'fleeing the sultry summer heat / and my prying gaze.' It was so poignant to me, that you brought in the theme of observation and how it affects the subject, and using that as a concept to underline the interconnectedness. There's that 'ludo-narrative resonance' I love so very much to see! To observe an observer in the midst of observing: bringing the reader literally into the seat where they themselves, as a being, can resonate on a meta-textual level and feel, themselves, interconnected with the story. In that way, I felt inspired to regard my own interconnectedness with the world around me, as a person engaging with the art: such a thing is the definition of effective art. Masterful!
My favorite part, however, was in dusk/autumn. In my playthrough, it was the final part, so it felt meaningful to me personally as a reader/player to read: 'life remade itself, sculpting its own form like clay.' On a subjective level, it reminded me of my own individual growth journey, and that I had a right to feel included amidst the threads of the great tapestry of nature.
(I also just realized it's mirrored in your season-choice of autumn, alluding to change, both corporately and individually, in nature and the beings that are, for better or worse, part of it, shaping and creating and changing it by the very nature of *being* it, as in that sense it interacts with itself. In that lens, speaking as a very neurodivergent person, any sort of difference from the norm really is shucked of stigma, isn't it? Seems silly to feel ashamed of the natural deviations of an always-changing, interconnected nature, or pressure to alter our 'clay' to match the imaginations of beings that are not us. These are some of the thoughts I'm taking away from the experience of engaging with Mandala.)
Again, well done, and I look forward to your next release!
Myself and a lot of my close friends are in the process of reshaping ourselves either figuratively or literally, and I think about that when I see amphibians, which must reshape themselves in order to survive.
Well said!
Oh, this was a very interesting piece of art! Honestly, as someoen who's been practicing poetry for eight years, I started to think about how the forms it could take nowadays with a multimedia way of expressing it!! It reminds me of calligrams. You created something very interesting here and I think we should be exploring this more!
For the actual text, now, I enjoyed the circular motif, and the connection to nature by senses! The renewal of these sensations (imitating the one of seasons, or the days cycling) was something I appreciated!
Been having a rough day and this really calmed me down a lot. ;_; <3 Thank you for this! Well done on the game!! <3 <3 <3
Sooo relaxing
What a lovely poem! Works great with the visuals and music.